From the Pocket of a Dream

*My Late Summer*

Thunderstorm in the late summer.
Like a lightning you struck
starting the rain, turning it into the river
A water fury of emotions
flooding one world of drought.

© Eclipse 2011

Shared on Poetry Potluck


21 comments on “*My Late Summer*

  1. Raven
    June 7, 2011

    How quickly a thunderstorm can turn into a flood. Beautifully put my friend.
    Enjoy this week. Rx

  2. deadpoet88
    June 2, 2011

    Amazing, you’ve said so much in such few words. A rain of emotions can move the world

  3. Sue Dreamwalker
    June 1, 2011

    the fury of a storm unleashing not only the elements but the emotional storm in her wake as she leaves behind a trail of tears, or a rainbow of delights..

  4. luna15
    June 1, 2011


  5. Becca Givens
    June 1, 2011

    A water fury of emotions
    flooding one world of drought.

    Very nice imagery – powerful!!

  6. mindlovemisery
    May 31, 2011

    Beautiful you’ve captured such depth of emotion in a short powerful poem

  7. Sam
    May 31, 2011

    It happened to me last summer… love the play on words

  8. aussieian2010
    May 31, 2011

    The unpredictable fury of mother nature , how well we know her violence when she wreaks havoc on our lands and crys her tears here in Australia
    Short but to the point
    I liked it

  9. Andy
    May 31, 2011

    My dear Eclipse,
    Yet again I am never disappointed when I stop over.

    Simply wonderful.

    Thank you for your tireless support of my blog:-)

  10. Fred
    May 30, 2011

    Thanks for sharing this piece. For being only 5 lines, the picture painted provides images you’d expect in much longer work. Excellent job. I really enjoyed

  11. kez
    May 30, 2011

    short and sharp packs an impact thanks for sharing

  12. Jingle
    May 30, 2011

    that’s part of life,
    otherwise, it is boring or dry.

    cheers, loved your way to conveying your message,
    Happy Potluck!

  13. Isabel Bush
    May 30, 2011

    lovely. powerful poem.

  14. eddietwohawks
    May 30, 2011

    you have struck my heart and my mind dear friend
    wonderful poem
    love, Eddie

  15. Mihir Vatsa
    May 30, 2011

    Its good. From start to the end. The crisp narrative line maintains the coherency.

    Very nice.

    Best regards.

  16. Oh I misread. I thought it said..”leave the last line. But really, I like it better without the last line.The terseness is so eloquent.

  17. I agree with Poetryroad. Without that last line , the poem becomes so much more powerpacked.

  18. ALIVE aLwaYs
    May 30, 2011

    Nothing seems right for the world, first drought and then flood, one after another.

  19. poetryroad
    May 30, 2011

    Love the last line, it turns and ends the poem so eloquently!

    May 30, 2011

    Like a tap being turned on, like a shower pointing to earth-its a lovely bit of poetry!

  21. Daydreamertoo
    May 30, 2011


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