*Departed*

On the day of departure
the birds were sad
Their crystal tears
rained
down the branches
A strange wind
sneaked around
through the alley of memories
It wore sorrows
upon its wings
An unusual kind
never felt before

A part of soul
died
on that day
The pain became numbed
No one was left
at the house of childhood
The heart became stone
No more mourns
The eyes were glaciers
No tears down the cheek
Only the birds cried
on the day of departure

***

© Eclipse 2011

For One Single Impression
 Poetry Potluck and Poets United

Image: Tears Of Stone

~ by Eclipse on June 20, 2011.

21 Responses to “*Departed*”

  1. you captured the emotions of leaving… I hope that you left only the bad memories… among the tears…

  2. I know such pain, capable of destroying the soul, and you said it all…

  3. Something very beautiful, in how you have handled such sadness.

    Nice to find your words.

    Eileen

  4. there is beauty in the sadness and the tears you write about, beauty in the words and the feelings you fill the paper with.

  5. beautiful. just beautiful.
    hugs.
    Luna

  6. Stunning the imagery, the heart-rending emotion, your delicate words always so beautiful

  7. What a way to describe the pain!
    Expressive words indeed.

  8. Brilliant poem…so much pain and sadness oozes through…and love the picture that goes with it…

  9. I love the imagery of the crying birds being the only ones to mourn.

  10. How is it possible for sadness to be beautiful?
    Truly heartfelt, captured perfectly by the image.

    My dear, you’re a blessing to many of us!

  11. Wow, such wonderful and beautiful imagery!

  12. Beautiful

  13. I love all of it ~ the image and the words…and especially these ~

    Their crystal tears
    rained
    down the branches
    A strange wind
    sneaked around
    through the alley of memories

    Ohhhhh

  14. Unbelievable how good this piece is. Narrative journey here is filled with imagery well painted. I love the description/reflection breakdown between the first and second stanzas. Thanks so much, really liked it:)

  15. visual and heartfelt.
    you rock.

  16. Goes to the depth of loss of loved one of childhood. Like another has said I too was drawn in…great poem Eclipse.
    I absolutely love the graphic too! Perfect choice:)
    Rx

  17. It hardly gets more sad and painful. You really made me feel the sorrow.

  18. very very cool. Rock on.

  19. Yes, it’s a very sad time when we lose someone we love so dearly. Exqisite prose, once again.

  20. Lovely sadness. Very well written. I thoroughly enjoyed this one!

  21. this is absolutely exquisite!!!!

    {i’m sorry i haven’t been visiting~severe computer problems for weeks and having trouble even getting posts up. i’m really looking forward to catching up.}

    this is stunning! ♥

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