From the Pocket of a Dream


On the day of departure
the birds were sad
Their crystal tears
down the branches
A strange wind
sneaked around
through the alley of memories
It wore sorrows
upon its wings
An unusual kind
never felt before

A part of soul
on that day
The pain became numbed
No one was left
at the house of childhood
The heart became stone
No more mourns
The eyes were glaciers
No tears down the cheek
Only the birds cried
on the day of departure


© Eclipse 2011

For One Single Impression
 Poetry Potluck and Poets United

Image: Tears Of Stone


21 comments on “*Departed*

  1. Sue Dreamwalker
    June 25, 2011

    you captured the emotions of leaving… I hope that you left only the bad memories… among the tears…

  2. seabell
    June 23, 2011

    I know such pain, capable of destroying the soul, and you said it all…

  3. Eileen O'Neill
    June 23, 2011

    Something very beautiful, in how you have handled such sadness.

    Nice to find your words.


  4. Broken Sparkles
    June 22, 2011

    there is beauty in the sadness and the tears you write about, beauty in the words and the feelings you fill the paper with.

  5. luna15
    June 21, 2011

    beautiful. just beautiful.

  6. mindlovemisery
    June 21, 2011

    Stunning the imagery, the heart-rending emotion, your delicate words always so beautiful

  7. PremI
    June 21, 2011

    What a way to describe the pain!
    Expressive words indeed.

  8. Psych Babbler
    June 21, 2011

    Brilliant poem…so much pain and sadness oozes through…and love the picture that goes with it…

  9. lizbethsgarden
    June 21, 2011

    I love the imagery of the crying birds being the only ones to mourn.

  10. Andy
    June 21, 2011

    How is it possible for sadness to be beautiful?
    Truly heartfelt, captured perfectly by the image.

    My dear, you’re a blessing to many of us!

  11. Teri C
    June 21, 2011

    Wow, such wonderful and beautiful imagery!

  12. Rosemary Monteith
    June 20, 2011


  13. helen
    June 20, 2011

    I love all of it ~ the image and the words…and especially these ~

    Their crystal tears
    down the branches
    A strange wind
    sneaked around
    through the alley of memories


  14. Fred
    June 20, 2011

    Unbelievable how good this piece is. Narrative journey here is filled with imagery well painted. I love the description/reflection breakdown between the first and second stanzas. Thanks so much, really liked it:)

  15. Jingle
    June 20, 2011

    visual and heartfelt.
    you rock.

  16. Raven
    June 20, 2011

    Goes to the depth of loss of loved one of childhood. Like another has said I too was drawn in…great poem Eclipse.
    I absolutely love the graphic too! Perfect choice:)

  17. Martin
    June 20, 2011

    It hardly gets more sad and painful. You really made me feel the sorrow.

  18. Jesse Mitchell
    June 20, 2011

    very very cool. Rock on.

  19. Daydreamertoo
    June 20, 2011

    Yes, it’s a very sad time when we lose someone we love so dearly. Exqisite prose, once again.

  20. charlesmashburn
    June 20, 2011

    Lovely sadness. Very well written. I thoroughly enjoyed this one!

  21. dani
    June 20, 2011

    this is absolutely exquisite!!!!

    {i’m sorry i haven’t been visiting~severe computer problems for weeks and having trouble even getting posts up. i’m really looking forward to catching up.}

    this is stunning! ♥

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