EclipseOfTheMoon

From the Pocket of a Dream

*The Last Sunset*

as a fish
caught
but dropped
out from the fisherman’s net
she tried to follow
wet marks
leading into the sea
of true emotions

as a fish
writhing in pain
until the breath killed her gills
she never made it

as a dying fish
upon a dry land
she could only admire love from the distance
before she closed her eyes
along with the sunset

***

© Eclipse 2011

Shared on Three Words Wednesday
and Theme Thursday

Image by ipadwallpaper.eu

 

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30 comments on “*The Last Sunset*

  1. Jo Bryant
    October 22, 2011

    this is tragically stunning in its impact

  2. Sue Dreamwalker
    October 21, 2011

    A Sad Tale.. beautifully told..

    Wishing you well my friend.. Love your new background too.. it loaded quicker than your other one..

  3. Broken Sparkles
    October 21, 2011

    Oh, so sad that she couldn’t make it … at least the sunset was tehre with her …

  4. Martin
    October 19, 2011

    Beautiful in all its lostness. I’m happy for you that this hopefully belongs to the past.

    • eclipseofthemoon
      October 19, 2011

      Thanks Martin 🙂 I’m happy to say that, unlike the some before, this one is pure fiction……..

  5. Sheilagh Lee
    October 19, 2011

    a sad but lovely story.

  6. jennygoth
    October 17, 2011

    a sad story but lovely eclipse xxjen

  7. Mrsupole
    October 17, 2011

    Also I thought I had written another comment here about the TT poetry you wrote. If it did not come through please let me know. It did say it was awaiting moderation so it could be in there somewhere.

    God bless.

  8. Mrsupole
    October 17, 2011

    Hi again,

    Just wanted to let you know that changes have been made at Theme Thursday and the new Theme is put up on Sundays and posting is still on Thursday when Mr. Linky goes up.

    The new one is up, so please come check it out.

    God bless.

    • eclipseofthemoon
      October 17, 2011

      Thank you very much for the info Mrsupole 🙂
      Those two last comments you’ve made were the only ones pending for now.
      Have a very nice day

      • Mrsupole
        October 18, 2011

        Your welcome.

        That is such a sad and poignant poem about searching for love. Very beautiful.

        Thanks for joining in on Theme Thursday.

        God bless.

  9. halfwaybetweenthegutter
    October 17, 2011

    This is lovely. You create an image so well.

  10. islandcat2u
    October 16, 2011

    awesome use of words and pix

  11. Androgoth
    October 16, 2011

    A lovely piece of writing Eclipse and thank
    you for offering such a wonderful poem 🙂

    I hope that you are
    having anice weekend 🙂

    Androgoth XXx

  12. Rosemary Monteith
    October 15, 2011

    Beautiful poem and photo

  13. cat.
    October 15, 2011

    Have you been looking into my soul? Love, cat.

  14. deadpoet88
    October 14, 2011

    You’ve brought out the pain of unrequited love very well. I love your comparison with the fish. Beautiful imagery, and very heartfelt words

  15. Andy Sewina
    October 13, 2011

    She’s got to be a mermaid! So sad, but beautifilly told!

  16. Mike Patrick
    October 13, 2011

    A fish out of water, willing to die for the breath of emotion. Very sad.

  17. becca givens
    October 13, 2011

    Eclipse — this was very touching … you evoke emotions with your great choice of words, layout and image. Thank you for sharing! 🙂

    Love the look of your site – I am sorry it’s been awhile since my last visit. I have been traveling for the past couple of months and I am far behind with catching up with everyone. Many blessings ~~ becca

  18. zongrik
    October 13, 2011
  19. Daydreamertoo
    October 13, 2011

    Awwww … I always want a happy ending. Beautiful, both picture and prose.

  20. abichica
    October 13, 2011

    amazing!! its so filled with emotion.. i absolutely love it.. and the picture is so beautiful.. 🙂

  21. brian miller
    October 13, 2011

    ouch….felt verse…the slow dying from lack of love…

  22. demonsking19
    October 13, 2011

    heart touching!

  23. Mar
    October 13, 2011

    Lovely poem and great shot!!

    fish

  24. cocomino
    October 13, 2011

    Great and impressive photo.:)

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