*The Saddest Memory*
“G” is for Grief
I hope
that somewhere in this cold world
there is a cure
against the evil darkness
You and I
as the autumn leaves
maybe are falling
to the ground
I’ve tried to find the key
of the black cover that holds you
in its cold embrace
I failed
A love was born
among the strong words
inviting me into the magic world
We were two strangers
suited so well together
yet
our love was not enough
The weakness was larger
it never won over fears
In stead of staying alive
together
we’ve chosen to slowly die
Alone
You’ve become a dead poet
but for me still immortal
The one from my dream
I was prepared to haunt you forever
So I guess we’ll be good darling
I’ll find you again
In another life
***
© Eclipse 2008 – 2011
Oh my! Those words have genuinely stirred me.
Helena said this on April 13, 2011 at 10:39 pm |
this is haunting poetry!! Great Stuff
shafeeq valanchery said this on April 13, 2011 at 4:48 pm |
Again and again… I am captured by your words…
Sam said this on April 13, 2011 at 10:16 am |
I can just say the same when I read your poems 🙂
eclipseofthemoon said this on April 13, 2011 at 1:27 pm |
I like the lull and flow. Comforting.
tara linda said this on April 12, 2011 at 8:33 pm |
Thank you tara
eclipseofthemoon said this on April 13, 2011 at 1:26 pm |
“” I was prepared to Haunt you forever””….
Your poetry and words deffinately haunt me.. never have I been touched by words such as within your poems Eclipse.. I always come back for more…
Hugs Dreamwalker
Sue Dreamwalker said this on April 12, 2011 at 8:08 am |
Thanks Dreamwalker…your flattering comments!.. 🙂
eclipseofthemoon said this on April 13, 2011 at 1:25 pm |
Provoking, and somewhat familiar.
torquethis said this on April 12, 2011 at 1:37 am |
Yes, the world is full with sad memories…Thank you for reading torquethis.
eclipseofthemoon said this on April 13, 2011 at 1:22 pm |
Beautiful poem with great imagery! loved it.
Dream Trekker said this on April 11, 2011 at 11:37 pm |
Thanks Dream Trekker. 🙂
eclipseofthemoon said this on April 13, 2011 at 1:19 pm |
Eclipse, I think you draw the finest imageries I’ve seen. Make the poem come alive through your words 🙂 Very beautiful!
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Vinay said this on April 11, 2011 at 8:04 pm |
Thank you very much Vinay, I’m glad you liked it 🙂
eclipseofthemoon said this on April 13, 2011 at 1:19 pm |
Beautiful poem ….So powerful is your emotions which we can feel from this poem Why it was not able to override the fears I wonder?
But as you say let us hope ….
“So I guess we’ll be good darling
I’ll find you again
In another life”
Rashmi said this on April 11, 2011 at 6:07 am |
Oh that is a long and not so happy story…The hope wins at the end 🙂 Thank you Rashmi
eclipseofthemoon said this on April 13, 2011 at 1:18 pm |
G is also for good.
Jesse S. Mitchell said this on April 10, 2011 at 5:22 pm |
…so it is…. 🙂
eclipseofthemoon said this on April 13, 2011 at 1:16 pm |
You are one fantastic poet I have come across Poet’s Rally.. and I’m glad I did. U echo all of what I & a friend feel and go through.. for reasons similar & different each.. Thanks for sharing.
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Purvi said this on April 10, 2011 at 12:44 pm |
The pleasure is all mine Purvi, I really love the special way of your writing 🙂
eclipseofthemoon said this on April 13, 2011 at 1:15 pm |
Like someone before me said, the intensity of the emotions kind of scared me. Beautifully written:)
Alethea said this on April 9, 2011 at 3:14 am |
It wasn’t meant to be scarry… :)I understand what you mean, Alethea, thanks for stopping by
eclipseofthemoon said this on April 13, 2011 at 1:13 pm |
This is a very strong and powerful piece of literature. Well written.
Ewan Walker said this on April 8, 2011 at 10:06 pm |
Thank you Ewan.
eclipseofthemoon said this on April 13, 2011 at 1:11 pm |
It is hard not to surrender to the passions. Nicely written!
honeyhaiku said this on April 8, 2011 at 4:16 pm |
🙂 Thank you.
eclipseofthemoon said this on April 13, 2011 at 1:11 pm |
A poem at the beginning so dark and at the end with a bright shining light of hope..
A very strong imagery that your piece creates..
Terrific!
Alcina
Alcina said this on April 8, 2011 at 1:22 pm |
Thank you for stopping by and your kind comment Alcina
eclipseofthemoon said this on April 13, 2011 at 1:10 pm |
Possessiveness? – perhaps but not wrongly so – in the sense that in all lives we all belong… beautiful poem
Paul said this on April 8, 2011 at 10:44 am |
Thank you very much Paul…you’ve just inspired me to write more in the same tunes…. 🙂
eclipseofthemoon said this on April 8, 2011 at 10:54 am |
Powerful. For some reason, the passion in this poem scared me. The passion, the possessiveness. It was scary.
Neeraja said this on April 8, 2011 at 3:17 am |
Possessiveness…in the last words you mean?…well … not easy to let him go 🙂
Thank you very much for reading Neeraja
eclipseofthemoon said this on April 8, 2011 at 9:17 am |
I like the way you reach out and touch immortality here, a well crafted piece!!
andy sewina said this on April 8, 2011 at 1:33 am |
oh thank you andy 🙂
eclipseofthemoon said this on April 8, 2011 at 9:14 am |
Powerful. I felt such profoundness.
JP
http://tasithoughts.wordpress.com/2011/04/07/lovers-we-are-now/
tasithoughts said this on April 8, 2011 at 1:25 am |
stunning and haunting.
die beautifully,
live wisely..
thanks for sharing..
Jingle said this on April 7, 2011 at 6:16 pm |
Thanks for the visit Jingle….I’ll use your words as a good advice 🙂
eclipseofthemoon said this on April 8, 2011 at 9:13 am |
slowly die alone…gave me so much chills….this is def a sad tale…though nicely written
brian said this on April 7, 2011 at 5:44 pm |
…it’s nice though, that all that lies behind now 🙂
Thank you very much for your kind comment Brian
eclipseofthemoon said this on April 8, 2011 at 9:11 am |
another life, same instances? broken hopes? emmm- leaves me thinking if it is good haha! nice write! my thursday~ http://fiveloaf.wordpress.com/2010/12/30/let-it-be-it/
fiveloaf said this on April 7, 2011 at 5:32 pm |
Sad poem but wow! the way you compose this was very well created. Your blog is awesome! Thanks for allowing me to take a look at your poetry.
John said this on April 7, 2011 at 2:46 pm |
Many thanks John and you’are welcome anytime
eclipseofthemoon said this on April 8, 2011 at 9:09 am |
“In stead of staying alive
together
we’ve chosen to slowly die
Alone”
And
the last stanza.
ABSOLUTELY BRILLIANT! 🙂
Mihir Vatsa said this on April 7, 2011 at 2:11 pm |
Thank you very much Mihir
eclipseofthemoon said this on April 8, 2011 at 8:57 am |